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Alternate Ending to The War if the Ember

 
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What did you think of the ending of The War of the Ember?
I HATED it! It should never have ended that way !!
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I didn't like it.
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It was okay...
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I liked it.
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TCS.Bookman
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 23, 2010 12:25 pm    Post subject: Alternate Ending to The War if the Ember Reply with quote

Made an alternate ending to the War of the Ember because I thought it wasn't a very good ending...just me. Feel free to comment.
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 25, 2010 2:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very well written, Gwen. I liked how you put more emphasis on the volcanoes than Lasky did, and both the Striga's and Nyra's death were more dramatic in your version, and by extension more descriptive. The only thing is that the very end seemed kind of rushed, like it didn't fit as the ending of a five-year series. I know it's not the actual ending, and you didn't write those books, so it's just idle criticism.
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 26, 2010 12:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks =)

I tried to drag it out more, but I couldn't think of much. Really, I just wanted to forget what REALLY happened and remember this instead Cute Owl
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 26, 2010 3:58 am    Post subject: Much Better Reply with quote

I had definitely would have prefer this ending rather then the quick and short ending in the last chapter of The War of The Ember. Good job :3
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PostPosted: Thu Aug 19, 2010 2:22 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I liked the way you discribed everything, but there were a few things I didn't like. Like how Coryn lost his toe. I would have prefered if Soren had lost his, because Coryn's already got a scar, but Soren doesn't have one of any type. And also, Coryn has little to no relation to Ezylryb, but Soren's got tons. Another thing: I also thought Coryn should only kill Nyra, and Soren should kill the Striga. Because Coryn hated his mother, and I thought that Soren would kill the Striga for doing what he did to Coryn.
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